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Recently a couple friends asked for my advice and help in finding a bicycle. Fortunately, though their needs and budgets were different, I was able to give them both the same, hugely important tip. It also meant I started checking the bikes for sale on craigslist and, in doing so, I discovered lots of people don’t know squat about how to advertise something!

Now before I get into this, I’ll admit I’m jaded and, being both a bike nerd and advertising copywriter, I’m being hypercritical. I also admit that, since most craigslist ads are created by people who don’t have advertising experience, I’m swinging at low hanging fruit. However, with all that said, let’s make fun of some really poor ads!

Let’s start with this one (click on the photos for a larger version):









“Just out of the box. Its brand new. Traveled only 1 block. Call or text…”

OK, there’s no description but, if you’re looking for this kind of bike, why not let the photo say it all, right? Well, the picture may be worth a thousand words but it also contains one glaring error; the front fork that holds the front wheel is aligned backward (and, in this configuration, the rider would never be able to align the wheel to go straight!). It’s easily fixed (you can literally hold the fork between your legs and rotate the handlebars 180°) but, if you don’t know bikes very well and just want something to cruise the neighborhood, you may not know that.

Lesson 1: Photos and graphics should project the best possible image of what you’re selling. 

Then, there’s this one:










Not too bad. Decent, informative, honest description. Several photos showing a fair amount of detail. So what’s the issue? The headline:

“Red and black road bike”

If you’re looking for a red and black bike, then this is a great headline! Otherwise it tells you nothing about the bike for sale other than it’s a road bike (that’s red and black).

Lesson 2: Your headline should grab your customer’s attention and draw them in.

And finally, there’s this:









If a picture is indeed worth a thousand words, and this ad contains three pictures, then we have three thousand words that do nothing to describe or sell the bike. What size is it? How old is it? How much has it been ridden? Would it be the right bike for me? These are all small details that someone may want to know, especially before they drop $800 on a bike! All we can ascertain from this ad is that the Cannondale bike is either so hot, so fragile, or so sacred that it has to be handled with heavy duty work gloves (or the bike is stolen and our perp is going to great lengths to not leave any fingerprints…)

Lesson 3: Copy should be used to sell your product or brand. Highlight the features and benefits (the selling points) of a product. Reinforce the promise your brand (or the brand you’re selling) makes to the buyer.

So, there you go. Three ads, three easy lessons to remember when advertising your business. For more examples of how not to advertise (like the above), check out craigslist. And, for more advice on advertising that will get your business rolling, check us out at